Tuesday, December 4, 2012

Two Shoes Tuesday: Lights

If you have not checked out Josie's blog challenge at Two Shoes in Texas, and like to keep the creative flow moving like me, then you are missing out on a great opportunity.

Josie gives a word prompt every Tuesday, and from there, it's all up to you what you make of it, and there is no time limit for your entry. This week's word is "Lights".

Coming off from a recent 100 word challenge on my last post, I decided to give this week's prompt a try by limiting myself to one hundred words as well.

Be warned. Most of my stories, like this one, tend to get a little dark,  just so you know. Enjoy. :-)

The Last Dance

Photo Credit: brh_images

The lights danced along the edge of the stage, moving with her rythm.

Malcolm took a sip of his drink and smiled. Her full red lips smiled back. 

He scanned across the patron audience, mostly forty-somethings aiming for a thrill.

He then spotted the signal, a hooded man with shades nodded his confirmation.

Later, as the song came to its end, she came to him.

"May I have this dance?"

"Absolutely," Malcolm replied.

She swayed before him, her touch intoxicating his senses.

Malcolm breathed in, with only one thought still looming over him: shame this will be her very last dance.



  1. A hit man; so her time for picking up suckers is over is it? Mind you she might need a rest with those heels. Great imagery in this short tale. (p.s. could I suggest 'looming' in the last sentence?)

    1. Ha! Thanks for pointing out the spelling. How embarrasing!

      Thanks for dropping by.

  2. ah ! this sure was chilling. but somehow a little predictable. Like something gave away the twist !

    1. Thanks for saying so, Nimue. I am still working on not giving too much of the surprise away in my stories, especially the very short ones.

      I think the hooded man may have given too much away, should've been more subtle.

      Anyway, thanks for the comment.

  3. Ooooh . . . I like. So how did he off her?? And why???

    1. Hi, Judy! Glad you like the story.

      As for how or why, I really left it up to the reader for the conclusion, one of those fill in the blank endings.

      Thanks for stopping by. =-)

  4. Well done! I look forward to more of your writing!

  5. Oooh! I like this very much! So tightly written that it flows smoothly with the rhythm of the dance. You create a powerful sense of foreboding, yet leave us wondering how it will all unfold. Really good writing, Alex!

    Thank you so much for promotIng Two Shoes Tuesday, I'm glad you've decided to join us there!

    1. Thanks Josie! Looking forward to the next prompt and keep up the grat work!

  6. Hi Alex ~~ Yes, this is a little out of my league. I was expecting perhaps for him to be an undercover officer working on a lead so that he could have charges to arrest her.

    That way she could dance again another day after she paid society.
    Jim's Tuesday Two Shoes (link)

    1. Hi Jim.

      A very interesting twist to the end. I never would have thought of that.

      I appreciate the comment and thanks for stopping by.