Saturday, February 23, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction: Abandoned

This story is linked with Lillie McFerrin's Five Sentence Fiction where the word of the week is "Abandoned".

It is a sidestory to Lost Lilly, a story that will be featured tomorrow in Paragraph Planet . An email I received earlier in the week told me the news so  you can check it out then. You can also find it on on this blog if your curious.

Have a great weekend.

Photo Source: Gabriella Camerotti

Lost Lilly: Catching Souls

Abandoned by the comfort of fairy tales and a loving home, Lilly roamed aimlessly through the city streets with her only possesions: her wagon filled with dolls.

She wore her white church dress when she visited the park, the one her grandmother bought her back when she lived under a strict God-fearing homestead.

Darkness began to loom when Lilly arrived at the park, but darkness never fazed her, for it was where The Reaper dwelled, and she knew he would always protect her from menacing predators.

Now perched on a patch of grass by the swings, Lilly listened for the voice that later came through a chilled breeze, asking in a firm thundering tone, "You have something for me?"

Lilly held one doll up in the air with a wide grin and replied, "I finally have her soul."


  1. This is very intriguing. Thank you for sharing this.

  2. Having just read your paragraph planet story it was great to find out a bit more about the lost girl who wanders the park - both great stories!

  3. I could easily see this tale, and the other of Lilly, being woven into a longer story with more about the souls collected. It's such an interesting idea and words make it become real!

  4. By the way, congrats on making the grade in Paragraph Planet with Lilly's tale... it is well-deserved!

  5. The ever ongoing fight between good and evil, here unfortunately another individual has been lost to the "DarkSide". But is there still a chance for goodness to return.

  6. A wonderful character...personifying a chilling variation of evil. Definitely want to know more!